Well done for integrating action and dialogue into your piece, Usman! Your submission is a lot more balanced now. Is this piece a true story from your life ie: creative non-fiction, or is it a piece of fiction? It feels more like fiction the way it has been written. You built the conflict nicely in waves, from the death of his parents, to his desire for education being withheld, to his losses in the crypto markets. You show the rise and fall from conflict to resolution or part-resolution as you develop the story. We also get a good sense of Danny's plight and his uncle's selfishness through the dialogue. I would have loved to have seen a bit more around how Danny came to live with his uncle after his parents' passing and the impact it had on him. Little bits of foreshadowing showing the change in his uncle's demeanour towards him as a result of him having access to and control of the inheritance. I would also have loved to have known what happened in the end. What did Danny do to overcome the latest obstacle that he faced in his life?
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