First off, I'm ecstatic that you did this exercise! So awesome.

5 hours! Wow! This is tough. For the @weekendfreewrite that I've done, that sounds about right. I actually have had to spread it out over a couple of days this last time.

The story is a fun read. I laughed when Leo found out that he was being used by Sandra. Leo's phone ringing at the end, with his ex-wife/woman on the other end, was an interesting element. Makes me wonder if the relationship with Sandra was a way to get back at the person on the phone or that he was done with her completely and moved on with his life, only to end up with someone else who was cheating on their fiance. HAHA! The cycle continues.

There are some corrections to make (possibly on both ends - please, if you were confused by the instructions, point out where they were unclear to you so that I can correct them). In the contest instruction, there is a post I wrote that may be used as a guide.

You don't have to make a separate post. Just correct the mistakes here on this post to make it a valid entry. However, consider posting your corrected story above and leave all of these mistakes at the bottom so that we have an example of the differences so that others can see what worked and didn't work (if you do this, I can use this post as a further example of what is expected, too).

• I liked what you did with the numbers (perfect way for yourself to keep track) but providing the numbers in front of the sentences isn't necessary for this contest. Those can be removed. There should be paragraphs like the example provided in the contest instructions.
  
  
• As you wrote it, this is actually one sentence -->

4- The bill is settled
8- Sandra exclaimed while she opened her purse slowly
"The bill is settled!" Sandra exclaimed while she opened her purse slowly. <-- One long sentence.

There are a few other places that you did the same as above. Those will need to be corrected.

• There are a few places where there are no punctuation marks at the end of your sentences. Please, fix it. Also, the parenthesis (") encapsulates all that a person is saying. You have in a few places just one is found at the end of what a person is saying. It needs to be at the start of the sentence as well.
  
  

• This here...

24- Doing things together become their objectives. Though, relationship matter was hidden and kept secretly. Certainly, they are both matured and sensational about live affair.

... is three sentences. It needs to be a single, 24 word sentence. (I know this is tough!)

• Not a must, but don't be afraid to give a title to your story.

All and all, you have a story. I can't wait to see the corrections.