PHaaaa, its just a shame not many people are commenting grrrr.

When i tried showing this to one of my school friends. He suggested adding some sketches or simple drawings. *(Stick figures are cool)

Not really sure if its because i read light novels but he only read the 16yo guy i told him about. The rest he had a hard time imagining without visuals.

GRRRRR! Draw something 2D!