thank you

thank you so much

Nice poem. I wonder how it would read with only capitals for the first word in the sentence, what sort of flow it would have.

May I make a suggestion that you start a new line when you capitalise a new word as this can cause gramatical confusion

Love the way you structured this. You could even turn the sentences into stanzas

Great positive message and image.

Really like how the imagery you use reflects the weight of what the character at the centre of the poem feels.

There's a really great Nick Cave and the Bad Seeds "Death is not the end". I love the finality and inevitable ending you poem has.

Love the Lana del Ray song. If you find it difficult to proof your own work give it to a friend to read. I'm terrible at this. All that said I loved the poem

I really like your structure and how you break it down at the end.

I love the way you lay out your poem it matches the river you describe in the beginning.

This poem has a really great flow between lines. Glad you didn't use rhyme to create that.

I think that's the first time I've seen a semi colon in a haiku. Loved it.

I do like the thwarted romance of it all and I love that you didn't resort to rhyme, the piece has a rhythm and a flow of it's own.

Love the end rhyme in the stanzas and that you so casually broke it in one of the. Great images

I really lie you rhyme scheme it helps give the poem a sense of flow.

this might be a bit strange but I really enjoyed your use of grammar in the poem.

I like the poetic use of prose. You have created a vivid image.

I really like the shape of the poem on the page. The bottom looks like a chalice

Nice use of mirror imagery, Nicely structured stanzas . Really crisp images.