Your approach is absolutely correct and your treatment of the prompt is inventive. I really liked it!

That is not what I am talking about. I am talking about the difference between a journalistic report and a fiction story. They both could be discussing the same facts, but the treatment of those facts in these two genres is different.

In a journalistic report, one only states the facts, places them in a logical sequence and uses good clear and descriptive language so that the reader can understand what went on.

In a fiction story, the facts should be given through the emotional prism of a character so that the reader could relive the described events together with the characters.

Your entry is presented in a more of a journalistic report genre. The point of the fictional story could be very simple, but because the author made the reader suspend the disbelief, made him participate in the action on the level of neurons, the point of the story is perceived by the reader is much more powerful.

That's why I thought a talented author, as you are, could probably attempt to do a more fictional story.

But this is only my wish. I'd be interested to see what type of emotions you can bring to the table. Otherwise your story fine as it stands.

Cheers!