Wow I must say you're good with this... Giving review of one's work, any writer will improve quickly with reviews like this.

I think I understand what you mean by Nancy is too good 😅 and I take it that it was decided by the writer to put her out in the story that way.

Overall, your rating for the story is cool after all you've said for better improvement.

Grindan is an amazing writer, I've read some of her works before and I look forward to reviewing her story again.

This is well written, all the best in the contest.