Hi @zeleiracordero and @sarez. I love this exercise they did together.
I note that in the first part the narration is very serene and with the proper presentation of the main character.
Then, Sarez takes the reins and his narration becomes very fast. The literary images you use give the text a good speed and also you get a very warm atmosphere to discover, before reaching the end (I like that), that Liam was in love.
I think it is a difficult but very creative exercise. Congratulations to both of you! Receive a big hug