Hi. First I would like to make an observation about we-write / freewritehouse. I find it fascinating what they have achieved. Many people have written in this "contest", I don't know if it really is a contest; But the truth is that they have motivated many people to write fiction narrative and that is spectacular. For that I congratulate @zeldacroft and @FreeWriteHouse

The following is your narration @mgaft1. I feel you achieved a great story. Even when the character Clara is not well defined according to my appreciation.

It is complicated to write the continuation of a text that is not yours.
It is complicated because the rupture of narrative style is observed.

Your proposal of two endings is genial and the first time I see it. Or an ending with then, you understand ..

Anyway, good work and it was a pleasure to have read you @mgaft1