First I want to tell you that I am fascinated to see new narrators on steemit. I have spent the whole week reading dissimilar stories, from fantasy worlds to real stories.
Second. I loved the beginning of this story. In my opinion, I would change the title because the end does not necessarily justify it. Think about it.
"The telephone ring" Suggested title. You like?
A big hello @ivanm7. I hope to read you again.