Hi. I don't like to rate anyone's writing because everyone has their own style and references to write. Your fiction story catches you from the front line. I don't know why you called your principal person Gris, however it generates a feeling of chill and tenderness. Gris may be afraid (I found that idea incredible in the text). Overall I loved your story. It has a distant air of dracula but blood and candies are like that, right? A great pleasure to have read. A big applause too, regards @dmoonfire