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What a magical, sensuous, and well-crafted tantric story erh.germany@erh.germany! Outside is nearly 0 degrees Celsius, with the wind chill factor, and here I'm sweating all over. Phew! If I smoked, I'd be needing a cigarette about now. There is so much lushness to this story that I don't even know where to begin. The omniscient narrator takes us into a steamy day in the life of tenants, as waves of eroticism wash over them. You have done a marvelous job of describing each relevant detail and woven a tapestry of interconnected delicious tales. Very impressive. In some ways, it feels like we ourselves are peeping into the lives of these neighbours.

On floor number two, a particularly interested tenant posted himself on the rear balcony to find out if the sighing could be heard all the way there, to sit undisturbed in his comfortable armchair and not be seen by anyone else eavesdropping.

Come on, let's be honest. Haven't all of us apartment dwellers done that once or twice? This brings back memory of my student days, heh, oh yeah...

Directly above the love nest also lived a student, who heard nothing, because she was typing her thesis

A wonderful subtle sense of humor.

"Imagine the whole world lying together. Everyone, without exception, would have nothing better to do than make love and maybe have a bite to eat in between."

Yes, indeed!

The student, for example, folded her book closed

Breaking the scenes with bold text is a great device, makes it easier to read and follow the story. It is well designed and structured.

Soon the house was languishing and whispering from every pore

I like how it seems that the house is alive, like a single organism.

So they ate out the refrigerators, fed themselves with the choicest of what the pantries had to offer,
uncorked the best wines and let the champagne foam.

I love how, little by little, all mayhem breaks loose. Love is certainly contagious.

She and the man embraced, thinking they alone were responsible for this phenomenon.

All at once everything was forgotten and love had taken possession of Earth.

A global wave of erotic novelty washed over the world. Theoretically possible, according to some neuronauts Surely, our leaders would do well to chill out and make love instead of war.

The accompanying images are fun and delightful. Then to top it off, you also wrote in Spanish with propper grammar and punctuation. Wut?! If I had a sombrero, I would take it off, and bow to you, my lady. Ole! Ole!

But I can't leave this comment with just praises. I know you also like some constructive feedback. So here it goes. I've noticed that your posts never appear in the intended community. For example, this post is supposed to be published in the Writing Club community, but when you go there, it doesn't appear in the community's feed. So it doesn't get those views. You likely already know this, but if you don't, then after subscribing to the community, you can post by choosing that community from the drop down menu (if you use PeakD like I do). On my end, the drop down menu looks like this:

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If you don't choose a community then by default, it will publish the post on your blog only and associated tags. You may already know this, but I just keep seeing your amazing posts not reaching their intended audience. And this post really deserves notoriety for its brilliance and sensuous message of peace. I haven't been much online lately, and I didn't catch this post (and the original challenge post) until today! What a wonderful treat!

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