Hello @modifiers. You have an interesting theme for the prompt. As I was reading it, I could understand what you intention was.

May I make a suggestion? Your thought comprised one long sentence. You need for your readers to take a break with a period at the end of a complete thought. How about consulting a grammar program if you need it. It'll help with punctuation. A good program is: grammarly.com

Thanks for sharing your micro story. Take care.