You have a creative idea here and it functions as a very short story but I wonder if you could go back and expand it into a deeper tale? The ancients believed a thing could be perfect whatever its dimensions and that's true but there's a difference between a sketch and a portrait. In such a wee tale we have only a sketch of Lia, the town and the mysterious wind - the townsfolk are mere background characters. I think you have the ingredients here for an intriguing tale if you add depth.