Wow, @fantom22. That is quite a whirlwind story, and you have a lot of characters! I do have a few tips for you to help with crafting stories:

• In a short story, you probably want to keep to just a few characters.
• Think about making one person your main character. The goal is to get your readers interested in that character's drama. If they are interested, they will keep reading.
• For short stories, consider a less epic story line. What you have here is a story that could be told in novel or a feature-length movie. A short story is meant to give a "slice of life" or just one important scene or event. I recommend reading the stories of @bruno-kema. He has mastered the art of telling short stories. Good luck and keep writing!