RE: RE: Freedom Comes at a Cost (Original haiku/senryu)
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RE: Freedom Comes at a Cost (Original haiku/senryu)

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heymoeshu,

im going to be critical on this, with caSE, as haiku are generally all lowered, unless proper nouned.

it also doesnt appear to compleat, as a haiku would, with a sort of final gesture or windful wistful blist of logic or heart felt lossy gain. perhaps i picked up my haiku from this book of dead philosophers, besides me -- but i THiNK! Im going to rewrite it for you --

freedom pays this flag
back again a tissue wept
risen to don bow

the last line is obtuse, in reference to how aikido master belts are counted up and one less than trained master. I guess if one was his own master, he would train others, so

risen don bows known

peace!

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