This requires further explanation.

Rewritten with more detail.

"'With a free Hive account .."

Going to save emphasis for the more relevant section as we do not want dapp owners and builders thinking its all about onboarding non-investing users.

Strike 'the'.

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'Hive accounts create

Good wording. Added 'existing' but good.

Stolen

Nice catch!

'This provides a positive...' or 'enables'a positive....

Went with enables.

'...or are unfamiliar...'

Thank you for being the only person to read this document line by line.

'required', or 'New users don't need'

Went with required.

Add 'as available' or 'unless someone already used that name.' or words to that effect.

Rewrote this section some. It had additional issues.

'that is maintained by a diverse set of autonomous servers'

Rewrote that entirely to equalize with Tech Vision.

17 consensus witnesses can censor anything they want. Best to not pretend that isn't true.

This is very difficult to do and would break the blockchain at best. It can only be done in cases where the content of the transactions is so damaging its causing the blockchain to halt. Altering the contents of any blockchain arbitrarily automatically nullifies the purpose of the blockchain. Changing the state of the blockchain post fork (like Steemit did) is another thing but the previous state and records would remain written into earlier blocks.

I changed the paragraph somewhat to make it clearer. There are some highly technical elements that may be discussed here but they are beyond the reasonable scope of the whitepaper and border on post-grad thesis research paper material.

(tbc)