RE: RE: [ENG/ESP] Don't Toy With Me, Miss Nagatoro | ¡Review!
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RE: [ENG/ESP] Don't Toy With Me, Miss Nagatoro | ¡Review!

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Overall I like the review, but there are a few things I want to point out.

"In this article I will show you one of the most recent anime in the anime industry" there is never an instance in which you are going to say 'most recent anime not in the anime industry', so it's a very redundant statement. There are a few instances like this in the review.

The other is you type out the characters physical description immediately beneath an image of the character. We can see the character, we don't need the written description unless you are going to talk about the artistic reason behind the choices. You end up making the review a lot longer than it needs to be doing this without adding anything of substance. Take a bit of time and trim out unnecessary fat from the review and you can get the point across in fewer words.