RE: RE: One Cyb'netic Hymn
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RE: One Cyb'netic Hymn

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Hey martinstomisin@martinstomisin, I'm glad you liked it and thanks for chiming in on how you see the piece. I will happily comment a little on my "Writer's Intent." :-)

Firstly, I am obliged to give the disclaimer that I believe the meaning of a piece of poetry lives not primarily in the writing of it, but the reading of it. In other words, even for myself, the so-called "author," any given piece I write has no meaning so-to-speak until I am in the moment of reading it — either out loud, or in my head. And then, the meaning will always be subjective, revealed momentarily.

One aspect that I do feel I can easily elucidate is the process in which a given piece came into being.

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In this case, the main inspiration for the piece was the first image in this post, which I created with Deep Dream Generator by filtering a smartphone photo of a plant in my backyard after heavy rain when the sun came out — through a collage of screenshots from the game Lost Relics and some public domain images.

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cybernetic leaves.jpegObserving this image, the phrase "cybernetic leaves" came to mind, along with the intention to create a stream-of-consciousness piece with heavy focus on rhythm and rhyme — in other words, a VERSE poem.

In terms of impetus, that was all — that it be about "cybernetic leaves" and that it should flow rhythmically. As with other poems in which I don't specify a rigid meaning, I tend to gravitate towards speculation about (and ecstatic praise of) the beauty of existence, along with its mysterious origin in (I believe) some kind of cosmic hyperintelligence that in-forms it.

In this piece, I am daydreaming about the veins and patterns of leaves and how they display the masterwork of a living entity we call a plant — which descends from those unspeakably old beings, the first who dreamed such things until they became physical:

of beingnesses crumbling
from ancientness, and mumbling
the blessings of the first few thoughts:
what things those first few curses wrought!

Here also, I am poking fun at the joy — and pain — of existence by referring to those early thoughts (of which we all came) as both blessings and curses.

In the final stanza, I am expressing wonder at all the cells, molecules, bacteria, organs, etc. that make up living things as they "weave their spirals" to form veins for nutrients to flow through — whether blood or the fluid that transports the same in plants, and transitioning into speculating on human beings as a sort of "plant" which roams about, creating purposes of our own, exploring wildernesses and constructing shelters for ourselves in one enormous, terrible, and beautiful "cyb'netic [cybernetic] hymn."

(Note — the purpose of the pronuncation cyb'netic is to better fit the established rhythm of the piece)

Here is the Merriam-Webster's dictionary's current definition of "cybernetics" —

cy·​ber·​net·​ics

the science of communication and control theory that is concerned especially with the comparative study of automatic control systems (such as the nervous system and brain and mechanical-electrical communication systems)
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Thank you for giving me the opportunity to reflect upon my writing and caring enough to ask about my "Writer's Intent!" Below, for reference, I will show the rhythmic breakdown of the lines. Recently, I have not done well in recording recitations of my poem! This comment reminds me to return to that practice, as I feel it is easier for people to connect to my writing when I record myself speaking them.

Note that in the breakdown below:

  • bold represents a stressed syllable
  • italics represent an unstressed syllable
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cy·ber·net·ic leaves5
and all the ways to lea·ven trees8
fer·men·ta·tionof the skies7
and all that soars and all that breathes8
  
with·in the con·fines of the man·na9
be·ing ba·kèd by the sun7
u·pon the o·ven-land of ter·ra9
all in·scribed in bright and dun7
  
lines of si·gil and of syl·la·ble:9
hier'gly·phics low and pin·na·cle8
the breadth of un·der·stan·ding wide8
where all the hie·rar·chies di·vide8
  
to broa·den to that ol·der plane,8
that e·ver-all-ex·is·ting range8
of be·ing·nes·ses crum·bl·ing8
from an·cient·ness, and mum·bl·ing8
the bles·sings of the first few thoughts:8
what things those first few cur·ses wrought!8
  
what be·ings and edged veins of light8
that weave their spi·rals: win·ding tight8
as·sem·bled pled·gèd pur·po·ses8
to roam the wai·ling wild'nes·ses,8
(those quaint, for·bid·ding fast·nes·ses)8
that shel·ter all the roots and stem8
in one cyb'ne·tic hymn.6

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