RE: RE: These United States: Oklahoma: Catching The Ball - Part One
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RE: These United States: Oklahoma: Catching The Ball - Part One

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This could be a standalone slice-of-life story, nice job. I think the dialect works in the dialogue, helping to create the regional flavor. I also like how you build up to revealing that his father is in a wheelchair with the detail about his inability to teach his son how to run and catch.

@cliffagreen: This could be | Ecency