Wow, Sarez! You've given Shiro an incredibly rich and intriguing backstory. You've me wanting to read more (darn that 500 word limit - am I right?). This could easily become a series with the groundwork you've laid.

Shiro steeling himself against the expected rush was perfectly aligned with his characteristics from the beginning. It's a heavy burden he bears in trying to control the ghouls within. The shocking revelation of the girl's survival and her lineage gave us momentary hope that there would be a way for him to be free. Unfortunately she was in the wrong place at the very worst time.

Great ending line (and nod to the beginning) with the crimson mist enveloping the frustrated mages!