He frowns, "(t)here must have

is this as you intended?:

once in my (walking) moments and then in my other life."

"Is she the reason (why) you broke up with Mara and came back to West Harbour? - is the 'why' really needed? I know it is often used when speaking, but isn't that because most people speak worse than they write?

whether it makes me look needy - or sound needy?