"Then avoid the drones and try to return to the hotel," said Dara.

Haha, that line made me laugh. The fact that the corporate defector isn't human and is expecting to be brought back safely to her people is a fun twist! I like how your main characters are ordinary people put in mysterious, high-stake situations with political implications :) I'm intrigued by where this is all going, given that Harlen was chosen for this mission because of how he explained the politics and special interests behind the Water War.