Thank you for that critique. You know, an art teacher failed me once, in the 8th grade. I was so distressed my mother asked her why, because I loved art class. The teacher told her that it wasn't possible I was trying (!). So it's pretty clear I lack talent :) However, the points you offer may be helpful in the future as I try to create a visually pleasing effect.
Thank you for taking the time to offer suggestions. I have fun, and bring to the challenge the few talents I do have: a fondness for research, an interest in history, and almost unbridled enthusiasm.
It's obvious you have training, and talent. I wish you success commensurate with your skills.