Hi Marco,
I'm not in the mood for the city, as my haiku will show :)I just looked at you syllable count. I thought 5/7/5 was classic haiku. However, if that is not right, the second version will serve. This has the 3/5/3 count. Same sense, less words :)
Dissonance. Bustle.
Red. White. Black. Grey. The city.
Flowers blossom---where?
Dissonance
White. Grey. The City.
Flowers--Where?
RE: Mizu No Oto - Every Image Has Its Haiku - Edition #35 (English)