RE: when a man falls in love || entry for dreem-wotw

This is a great heart of a story and I hope you take time to develop it.

Right now, for me, it 'tells' the story instead of having the characters reveal it by what they say and do.

This makes for a less immersive story than may be expected for a tale of the utter devastation first love brings.

Thanks for sharing, I hope to see further drafts.