I enjoy the subtle rhyming you have going on - like voices and shyness. My favourite line is 'and through emojis his love will reach you' as you highlight all the modern ways we can communicate long distance

With a lightness of touch I liked how the poem concludes with an experience of shared food and information which reinforces the colleagues bond and highlights the human need for compassion.

Your cartoon made me laugh. I think my dad had has simply internalised the slave mentality that's the only way I can describe it. A sheep by nature, he is a gentle go along kind of man. His slavish addiction

It is a nice image

It's amazing how much emotion is conveyed. Thanks for your explanation re: poverty or I would have been inclined to read this as disappointment.

I really liked how you used the body as a canvas here. I was also struck by the barefoot in the woods line.

It's heartbreaking.

I liked the structure of the poem and the arrangement of words especially in stanza 3 - On heartbreak, Self-depreciation, Disrespected, You're left feeling like they wish the door would be locked but I

Thanks, I agree. They used to tell the truth 9/10 so you'd believe the one lie - now I'd say it was the other round. Just enough truth for believability's sake. Trouble is enough people believe the lies

In your verse, I see a couple, entwined in love's sweet grasp, Their souls, a fluttering bird, set free from life's wild rasp. Their dinner, a feast for two, a time to savor each bite, Their laughter,

I feel a lot of pain here. It feels like a snipppet of something longer...

Thanks for reading

I'm glad you liked it.

Thank you for your superb comment.

I think this is really good, intriguing poem with many admirable lines its hard to pick the out. Really enjoyed the refrain which held the poem together. Your poem is at once intimate and expansive.

I liked the way you've woven together the themes of memory, hope, and the cyclical nature of life. The imagery is rich and evocative, and the language is beautiful and expressive. The poem has a soothing

I feel like the world slows down when I read this poem. You capture romance here for me.

I like how your poems are very present in the moment. Standout lines for me were 'where we used to cook the food/ but now on a different mood. I can taste the crunch of the greens. It's a very joyous poem

Thank you for your time sharing. It's a sad story. There is a lot of mental illness in my own family and I share this mother's concern.

From your vivid imagery I get a strong sense of you watching the machines as your vision comes together for your poem. Through snapshots of fleeting moments, the triumphs and hard work of those involved